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behind space

super-silent trains drift
under soft white architecture
two spaces behind
the space I should be

men climb from sewage drains
two spaces beside me
trash litters the street
two spaces in front of me

wading through a gutbucket
one space below the noose
beneath the cotton abyss
one space outside the sun

I know where I am
and I know where I will be
two spaces forward, two spaces behind
where I want to be
©2007-2009 ~sytraxia
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behind space
super-silent trains drift
under soft white architecture
two spaces behind
the space I should be

men climb from sewage drains
two spaces beside me
trash litters the street
two spaces in front of me

wading through a gutbucket
one space below the noose
beneath the cotton abyss
one space outside the sun

I know where I am
and I know where I will be
two spaces forward, two spaces behind
where I want to be

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:iconleothefox:
About 97% of the time I hate poetry, but this is wonderful.

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"The only difference between a madman and myself is that I am not mad" -Dali

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:iconblackdav666:
this is a strong piece of poetry, i found it gave me a real sence of position when i was reading the piece, the progressive "step" works well and the imigary is very harsh and still beatifull at the same time. i love the idea of a "cotton abyss". :clap:

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